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UKArchive ID: 22316Message in a bottle by chrissytotoro
Originally published on September 12, 2008 in Poetry    

Not sure if I've submitted this before, can't find it. It's about things we should say and don't or do and no one listens.



Message in a bottle.

The message I wrote,
placed carefully in a bottle,
drifted back to my shore;
spoiled by the sea.
Unread,
unreadable.

The words I wrote
with a stick in the sand,
were washed away
before anyone
could read them.

The writing I did
in the condensation
on the bathroom mirror
dribbled together
became illegible,
was wiped away.

Only the words in my head remain
and they are unwritten,
unspeakable
meant only for my inner ear.

© chrissytotoro (chrissy on OLD UKA)
UKArchive ID: 22316
Archived comments for Message in a bottle
Sunken on 12-09-2008
Message in a bottle
Hello Ms. Chrissy. I hope the site's working okay for you now. I had similar probs but the server changeover seems to have cured it. It's good to see ya back. I enjoyed your piece more than Fry's Turkish Delight. This is quite a compliment. Thank you.

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to the discothèque, let's go

Author's Reply:
How spooky is that? I just ate a Fry's Turkish Delight, a whole bar all to myself. Thanks for reading.
chrissy

Ionicus on 13-09-2008
Message in a bottle
It is indeed nice to see you back, chrissy.
Pity the message in a bottle was spoiled by the sea. We'll never know your secret thoughts, now.
Nicely written poem.

Author's Reply:
Many thanks for taking the time to read and comment.
It's good to be back.

orangedream on 14-09-2008
Message in a bottle
A lovely poem, chrissy and it is nice to see you subbing again.

Tina

Author's Reply:
Tina, many thanks for taking the time to read and comment and for the most generous rating. All much appreciated.
Being able to contribute to the site again is good but I fear, given my luck at present, it will be temporary. Still, I shall keep at it as long as the technology holds up. Have so much to catch up with, here and elsewhere.
chrissy

teifii on 22-09-2008
Message in a bottle
Lovely to see you back -- even though you had told me. As to the poem, it's very descriptive but I must point out that fortunately you have written much also on paper and screen so we are not totatly deprived of your talent.
Daff

Author's Reply:
Daff, thanks for reading and commenting. Much appreciated
chrissy

discopants on 28-09-2008
Message in a bottle
I took this to mean that it's only the important things that we don't say, which is often too true!

Author's Reply:
Much thanks for reading and commenting.
Chrissy

jay12 on 06-10-2008
Message in a bottle
i feel like this at work. No one listens to anything I say no matter how helpful it may be. I'm going to give this poem top marks! Great one Chrissy!

Jay.

Author's Reply:
Jay, many thanks for reading and your most generous rating.
chrissy

jay12 on 06-10-2008
Message in a bottle
i feel like this at work. No one listens to anything I say no matter how helpful it may be. I'm going to give this poem top marks! Great one Chrissy!

Jay.

Author's Reply:

macaby on 21-12-2008
Message in a bottle
i liked the images in the poem, especially the writing on the mirror. i think that is something that we have all done at sometime or another, like a secret thought or the name of a secret love.

Author's Reply:
Many thanks for your comments. I'm glad you liked it.
chrissy