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UKArchive ID: 33393The boy among no-one by ifyouplease
Originally published on August 18, 2014 in Poetry

probably work in progress. something to post.



THE BOY AMONG NO-ONE

"What is wonderful he wondered in the deepest parts of inexistence…
Is it something I can taste, that I can palpate?"
He knew that all things he can sense are false.
Inexistence is the worst place to be, those clergymen were right, those bloodlines correct.
There is no Ego over there to show you how deep the rabbit hole is, there is no simulation.
But he ended up in Inexistence and everything was fine for him, there.
He could survive the endless knowledge of everything in no time.
Let him be wherever he wants to then.
Nobody can touch us from that place.
Who wants to be real when we can live forever here, where we can choose a simulation we like?
And repeat again and again the game of games?
He doesn’t know how lonely he is over there. We are not. Hell or Paradise, school or prison, we find people, many people to touch and to be touched.
We find the holographic pleasure exciting, we won’t allow his loneliness to spoil things for us.
We are here. Existing.
And nothing else matters.

© ifyouplease (ifyouplease on OLD UKA)
UKArchive ID: 33393
Archived comments for The boy among no-one
PSPaul on 18-08-2014
The boy among no-one
Excellent poem.I love a composition greatly when it talks like prose and feels like poetry.

Author's Reply:
thank you very much 🙂

Mikeverdi on 18-08-2014
The boy among no-one
Hello, I found this interesting, but I wont pretend to know where or what it's about 🙂 I also found the lay out a bit disjointed. All this is just me, and what do I know. I wish I could be more subjective.
Mike

Author's Reply:
I will update my reply above to Supratik and then update this one to read my explanation. thanks Mike 🙂

Supratik on 18-08-2014
The boy among no-one
Hello Nic,

I am very embarrassed at the thought of my response as a trigger to your not being in the right frame of mind. No defense, it is my fault, I apologise.

Best.
Supratik


Author's Reply:
what? no as i said was not in the mood this morning, i had to go to doctors etc. it was a crazy day for me today (i hate doctors and hospitals etc). and my reply was short because of my disposition! your comment earlier had absolutely nothing to do with my mood which is getting better.


Gothicman on 18-08-2014
The boy among no-one
I've always stood in awe of how your brilliant mind tries to capture new and different angles, even new logical points of departure, challenging all traditional "truths" and assumptions in the way we see or experience things. In this piece there appears to be the wish at least to escape the shackles of conventional thinking and the life situation we humans have developed, but also the fear of being the person taking on this challenge, safer to be observing the attempt from a distance, i.e. some evidence of ambivalence creeping in.

You're never dull to read! Thanks for this one, at least in its present form for I know you'll be back to tweak it again!

Author's Reply:
"you're never dull to read" is one of the best comments i have received! thank you, you saw many things, you even saw "the fear of being the person taking on this challenge" and your comment really rocks!

chant_z on 18-08-2014
The boy among no-one
I had to "chew" this one a couple of times which itself is a good sign. Works wonders and..no...I don't find it disjointed to the extent that it doesn't make sense. My guess is that it's up to the reader to make sense of it, at least half way and that challenge works wonders. Thanks!

Author's Reply:
thank you too, chant_z 🙂

ValDohren on 21-08-2014
The boy among no-one
Sounds very Matrix-ish to me - reality v illusion, existence v inexistence, and which is preferable. Much food for thought, enjoyed reading.
Val

Author's Reply:
inexistence is not that terrible. or is as terrible as existence. thank you for reading Val
Nic

Rosco on 30-05-2015
The boy among no-one
'many people to touch and to be touched by them.' I would cut 'them' in this line.

Very affirmative poem having just suggested the opposite about your work in my last comment. I'll stop bothering you now. I was trying to remember if you ever wrote lyric poetry without a narrator or pronoun referents(you, he, she, we and I) This may be another structuring strategy.

Author's Reply:
yeah must be cut it's greek there. because in greek i would have preferred it like that instead of using αγγιχθεί generally.
i hate general stuff and that's what i like about abstract pieces, and abstract prosetry cannot be general it is specific.

now this one is affirmative but from the point of negation, i have this theory about yes and no, which one would win in the end and the answer is NO because its quality is to disagree and yes will have to agree with no eventually. then NO has nothing to disagree with so it must be affirmative if it doesn't want to become self-annulling.