UKArchive ID: 36367stormwolf
Originally published on March 25, 2016 in Poetry
My father knew just how much my mother adored Cruden Bay, where she was evacuated as a child from Glasgow during the war. Two poems reposted after getting a boot up the bum from Mike Verdie to start posting again. 😉
Slain's Castle, Cruden Bay
He came to her last night.
She woke bemused
and holding light.
He had built her a house in Cruden Bay.
On a cliff overlooking the sea.
I kept scraping burnt toast,
in a stoic attempt
to hide feelings
wrought by her revelation.
But moistened eyes
and heart-pain acknowledged
a love that transcends
she's coming soon.
~ © Alison Stormwolf ~
Archived comments for The Builder
franciman on 25-03-2016
This is so you. A family forever entwined. My one niggle in an otherwise perfect piece is'inwardly' an inelegant, ungainly word that disrupts the flow for me.
Good morning Jim,
If it was you who nominated this thanks so much. I have taken out the 'inwardly' as I value your opinion. I was going to substitute either 'silently' or 'in silence' but thought it could still read ok if I just left it out. If you feel that was not a good idea let me know. This poem means a lot to me as does the other actually, so I am delighted to know it's been well received.
Supratik on 25-03-2016
Alison. A marvelous read. On one level, it's good to see you back with your sensitive pen. For me, you paint feelings through words. On another level, I am surprised to look at what I have posted today. Best. Supratik
Thank you for reading and commenting Supratak. I have been taking a hiatus as trying to divorce myself from all the events globally or would be writing very dark poetry. I am trying to concentrate on what makes my heart sing.
Mikeverdi on 25-03-2016
And there you are, thank you for gracing the post box again. It was empty without your words.
Hi Mike 🙂
Well, I thought it a bit too soon to repost the one you requested but maybe next week?
Happy Easter to you and yours.
franciman on 25-03-2016
Hurray! Tosses caber in delight.
e-griff on 25-03-2016
Excellent indeed. And as others have said, good to read your work.
Gothicman on 25-03-2016
Finely written sentiments Alison, spiritual feelings made more poignant by being genuinely biographical. The most treasured memories typifying the joy of unique existence are often capsulated in short periods encompassing both a time and a place, the core memory of special experience, and so skilfully captured here in your fine poem. Identified with,. and enjoyed, valuing as I do such nostalgic feelings as these.
I feel there's a Spring in your steps again!
"I feel there's a Spring in your steps again! "
Aye, the sap's a-rising. Happens every year, then full flood in summer, mellow in autumn, winding down to bleak miseryguts in time for winter :-/
This poem is written exactly as it occurred. Having studied dream analyses and knowing of my mother's great nostalgic love for Cruden Bay, I was very moved indeed. I pray that one day not too distantly, she goes to the house on the hill overlooking the sea that's waiting.
I know you do not believe in an afterlife as I do but many say that we create it as we desire with our thoughts and beliefs. In many ways we do exactly that here on earth too.
If there is a heaven it will not be in clouds for my mum but in a little house on a cliff in Cruden Bay.
pdemitchell on 25-03-2016
Glad to see the hearfelt howls and poignant prowlz again. Paul
Thanks Mitch. I am resurrected for Easter lol 😉
Pronto on 25-03-2016
Just breathtakingly beautiful Alison. Well done.
Thank you. This means a lot to me.
Bozzz on 26-03-2016
Alison, you know how much I admire your work, this piece shows in itself the spirit in which you love your mother as it shows your mother's love for your father and the house he built for her and you. The other day I heard that the best place to live in Scotland was in Stockbridge - perhaps Cruden Bay is even better? My Love...David
Yes! They said that Stockbridge is the best place to stay in Scotland. I must say I love it here. It's a very vibrant community full of creative people.
Mind you, it ain't cheap! ;-(
sweetwater on 27-03-2016
I agree with all the above comments, this is a truly beautiful piece. Sue xx
Thank you Sue