UKArchive ID: 36417Hewn in Rock by stormwolf
Originally published on April 8, 2016 in Poetry    

A moment from my memory bank


Slain's Castle, Cruden Bay scene of the poem.

We climbed the hill
in breathless strides
our hands were clasped together,
we cared not for the slippery paths
nor dark and stormy weather.

I stood outlined
by rough-hewn rock
where once, a window framed
the endless home of watery myths
and rocky bays, untamed.

On turning, smiling,
to your face
at once I was transfixed
by such a look I'd never known...
it seemed we were bewitched.

We kissed among
the grey clad skies
with hearts in tandem, spellbound.
Our love was sealed, in passion loosed
upon the muddy ground.

We've left the cliff
and gone our ways
but know, whatever ails you
I shared that love shown on your face

I'm here, if life e're fails you.

~ ยฉ Alison Stormwolf ~

© stormwolf (stormwolf on OLD UKA)
UKArchive ID: 36417
Archived comments for Hewn in Rock
gwirionedd on 08-04-2016
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Wow, you have a lovely grasp of rhyme and rhythm, when the fancy takes you! I would like to see more of this...

Just a couple of things though: "ere" means "before". I think you mean "e'er" as in a shortening of "ever". How about "if life should fail you", maybe?

Also, not sure about the spellbound/ground rhyme, because in "spellbound", the stress falls on the first syllable. But it's up to you of course.

Archie x

Author's Reply:
Hi Archie,
Thanks very much for that. I actually thought it should have had the apostrophe but gave it a quick look and ere was a word so did not pay enough attention. I like it though as I usually write as i speak and I would quite easliy use the word e're.
Like once I used the word 'oft' in a poem and somebody mentioned it and that is another old fashioned word that I feel comfortable using.
I don't have a problem with spellbound / ground as I like the rhyme to seem fluid rather than particularly contrived if you see what I mean.
I do value your opinion though as I know you know your onions, so to speak ๐Ÿ˜‰
Alison x

Supratik on 09-04-2016
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Splendid work Alison. How beautifully ypu have moved the poem. A clever centralised alignment is giving a very special touch. I will read the lines again. Supratik

Author's Reply:
Hi Supratik,
I like to center my font but stopped for a while after Trevor said it's too fable like ๐Ÿ˜‰
I know what he means so now only do it for some.
Alison x

franciman on 09-04-2016
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Great poem, Hen..
Reminds me of Hilaire Belloc, the seamless transitions the clever rhymes.
He must have been quite a lad? Managing to tempt such a sonsy lass up thaim rocks!
Jim x

Author's Reply:
Arrr Jim lad, he was quite a man. Winking smile
Actually, I very much dislike those rocks and the castle but it is very atmospheric. Some of the windows have a dead drop straight to the rocks below. The walk up on the other side is dangerous and unfenced and people and children have fallen to their deaths.
What did it for me, though, was when a dog I used to walk, went chasing another dog and fell over the cliffs. He was with his owner at the time, who dived off the cliffs to try to save him. It really is a miracle he survived and was rescued by the coast guard holding his dogโ€™s dead body ;-(((

They say Bram Stoker got his inspiration for writing Dracula there too. I would not be surprised.
I have no real desire to go there again but it does hold some memories for me as the poem shows ๐Ÿ˜‰

Alison x

Gothicman on 09-04-2016
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Brilliant HA! Very romantic and atmospheric, showing your versatility as a wordsmith too. Centering suits this one well....I hope you washed the mud off your clothes before going home.
Great revival!
LT x

Author's Reply:
Thank you, glad you enjoyed it.

Ha x

sweetwater on 09-04-2016
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Beautiful, atmospheric, and I love it. The second verse was a real favourite for me, spot on layout too. Sue xx

Author's Reply:
Thank you Sue. An old one revisited ๐Ÿ˜‰
Alison x

Romany on 10-04-2016
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This is lovely, very lyrical and evocative.

Author's Reply:
So nice to see you back! Thanks for reading and commenting 😊
Alison x

Supratik on 14-04-2016
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Trevor is right, but I thought that the alignment for this poem was justified. However, please take his view on this. Supratik

Author's Reply:
Hi again Supratik,
No actually I have no intention of taking his view on this thanks. I feel I am perfectly capable of making my own choices now.
The poem is mine and how I set it out etc is my decision. Others are welcome to say their opinions but ultimately it is up to me ๐Ÿ˜‰
Thanking you as always
Alison x

Supratik on 27-04-2016
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Don't I love this response! :-))

Author's Reply:
Hurrayyyy !!! 😈 😜 👍